Date: Jun 05, 2015 05:45 pm Title: Burn
Omg Chelsea I love this chapter so much they are just too cute for words. The part where Michael walks into the class and he and Madison ' s eyes meet then he smiles at her I was like awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. 😻😻😻 And the fact that you have them now spending time with each other outside of school I was waiting for that to happen. Regardless of how much Michael and Madison try to shake off their attraction towards each other I see something blossoming between them in the near future especially if they keep this up which I truly hope so. Thanks so much for this chapter I absolutely love it and can't wait for more.
Date: Jun 04, 2015 10:47 pm Title: Burn
Lines through your text? I see none, so maybe it's your computer?
2000 watts + your kind words? I'm excited to hear that you are pondering back over that story!
I like the little side bit/filler with Eddie. Those few lines gave comedic relief, captured the essence of the morning grind, and set the scene. Even without the face washing, etc, that alone was enough (for my imagination) to fill in the morning rituals.
Flash forward to Michael and Arianna. Such a typical dude, only thinking logically after he's gotten it in. His reason for snapping at Clayton was so obvious; besides a tense morning, he's never had those kinds of feelings for Arianna. Clayton's basically reminding him of what he hasn't had.
I like how this story is layered with drama, but it isn't the typical 'X knocked up Y, and Y's sister, but X is still married to Z' deal. The most palpable point of drama in my opinion arise in Michael's thoughts. His ruminations over his responsibilities, others' well being, points of guilt, etc. Then there is the tension that permeates every encounter between Madison and Michael.
jaf; you left off right when they are finally spending time together outside of the classroom setting. Such.a.tease. Well, I can't get too whiny about it because you gave so much meat in this chapter (and I'm not referring to that which was devoured by the siblings). As always I can't wait until the next!
Date: May 21, 2015 07:20 am Title: Nothing But Confusion Pt.2
It's funny how he mentions condoms yet I have yet to see them even attempt to use one. Their not humans but they can still produce children right? If so I really hope she doesn't end up pregnant if she's this annoying now I can just imagin how she would be if she became his babymama Lol.
Hahaha!! That's so true! Oh, Michael. In the chapters so far, they haven't used condoms, but they've been sticking to the pull out method and/or right before he "finishes", Arianna gets on her knees. Lool, thank you for your input, love. Thanks for the review! :D <3