Date: Sep 22, 2011 10:50 am Title: Chapter 4
Okay I'm going to be very blunt. I think this stroy is okay. But you need to go back and fix all your mistakes. Check your spelling. And you need to fix all the punctuation, use periods, commas, etc. And try to use more detail. All these mistakes can be a little distracting to some readers like me. But nice try, the plot to the stroy is good.
This is my opinion, you don't have to what I wrote.
Date: Jul 17, 2011 11:32 pm Title: Chapter 13
i like the plot and everything about this story but your grammatical and spelling mistakes, to say the least, really make me want to stop reading. somethings are so obviously spelled wrong or used incorrectly. i don't understand your obliviousness towards it though. but like i said, i'll continue reading because, and only, i like the storyline.
Date: Mar 02, 2011 06:24 am Title: Chapter 1
What you could do is Michael's tours are going good and he doesn't want to stop touring for the birth of the baby. So he calls Jessie and suggests getting an abortion. Jessie gets mad and they have a fight. Then you can go from there!
I like that idea thank you very much
Date: Feb 06, 2011 12:59 pm Title: JUST A NOTE
Mmm Maybe make Jessie like Johnny and break up with Michael with him just like he did with Tatiana and you know Michael doesnt find out and Jessie is cheating on him and when he finds out.. the I dont know you can take off from there :) its just a suggestion if you want or twist it :)
lol I was going to do that but I wanted janet to have some one to help her with Emma so I went with Johnny for that.