Date: Mar 30, 2013 09:33 am Title: Chapter 4
great story so far please continue
[Report This]Date: Jan 07, 2012 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 4
that was awesome i love it. when marie said she bored she remind me of that woman on remember the time when she wanted to entertained. cant wait to see what happen next.
Author's Response: I know right? When i was writing that myself it reminded me of her too. Thank you :)
[Report This]Date: Jan 07, 2012 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
aw michael asked her to be his girl i knew they make a good couple.
Author's Response: Yes he will realize that more later on the story. Thank you for your review.
Author's Response: Yes he will realize that more later on the story. Thank you for your review.
[Report This]Date: Jan 07, 2012 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 2
impressive. her dad should be supportive of her and respect her wishes that she wants to do the video with michael.
Author's Response: Sorry, I got mixed up in the reviews. :D now they're a couple lets see what happens
Date: Jan 03, 2012 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like where this is going. Here are some tips:
- At the beginning of sentences, use capital letters.
- When a character is speaking, instead of using colons, (Unless you want the story to look like a play) use quotation marks and use phrases like, "Michael said," and "She demanded".
Keep it movin' girl!
Author's Response:
iam gonna do that is just i did'nt have time but i will and as colons i use them sometimes and for phone calls but i mostly use qoutation marks. Thanks for reviewing :)
[Report This]Date: Dec 22, 2011 03:40 am Title: Chapter 1
it sounds amazing. please continue :)
Author's Response:
thank you so much! i will continue :)